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by Ed or Ian Henderson
Excellent, as ever. Just one line I don't like: "I've changed my life for you; I've altered my ways," just doesn't flow as easily as the rest. To me it stands out as being rushed. How about: "I've altered my life for you; changed in every way," You're not changing the wording much, but it suits the flow of each stanza much better I feel. Still, tis your poem Miss!