Carving your name

To begin with,
It was little pangs that reminded me I was alive,
Then as the blades scratched harder and deeper,
It became too much,
So I backed off.
But the further I went, the more it hurt.

*Thus stanza really stood out to me. I'm a cutter and I know too well what this feels like. I think you did an exceptional job on this poem. The title really drew me in and made me want to read this and I wasn't disappointed. I like how well this flows. I think you really told a sad common story in a creative way. I'm gonnae have to read more of your work, this was great. Keep it up dear. Nik*

I love this. You showed such strong emotion and it was a really good concept. Most people could relate to the pain the person is feeling. I just have a couple of suggestions, i'll put them in between ??.

A name is carved into my heart,
It?'?s stings and pusses and bleeds a lot,
So every time I see you,
it hurts a little more,
Just to remind me it?'?s there.

As if I don?'?t have to put up with you?r? voice enough,
That?'?s tearing holes in me,
And your sight is burning my flesh.
Im constantly tortured when youre around,
And the pain gets too much sometimes.

I carved your name into my heart,
But it wasn?'?t done all at once.
It took ages, ?this line doesn't really flow, maybe yu could say this in a different way? Even if you replace the word ages with so long or something?
And normally I don?'?t allow this to happen.

To begin with,
It was little pangs that reminded me I was alive,
Then as the blades scratched harder and deeper,
It became too much,
So I backed off.
But the further I went, the more it hurt.
^^lovee this stanza

I have to live with a name scarring my heart,
But it?'?s scarred my mind and body too,
I didn?'?t ask for this,
All I did was love you,
And all you did was force that blade into me.
^love the ending too, so powerful.

well done you are an incredible writer and i really enjoyed reading this. 5/5

Really good poem, I can relate to it. You expressed emotions excellently. 5/5

Yep, relate to that. this is good and very well written xxxx