I was the one.

by Jade Rossiter   Jun 20, 2007


Hanging from her bunk bed, pupils dilated, head swollen.
She swung solemnly back and forth,
her eyes had no emotion.
Her school tie wrapped around her neck, her diary lay open............

I was the one you laughed at, pointed at and called
names.
I was the one left till last when you played the games.

I was the one who sat alone at the back of class, the one that know one talked to only to harass.

I was the one without the makes, who never had no money, and that was kinda lucky cause you would've took them of me.

I was the one who scurried home with a gang of you behind me, not because you were my friends or out of popularity.

We played a game that for you was fun, you Evan won a prize, Who would be the first to bring tears to my eyes?'.

I was the one who committed suicide because of what you did, who hung still with fresh bruises that you took in turns to give.

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  • 17 years ago

    by That One Girl

    Wow that was amazing. i hope that it isnt true and well...... wow u left me speechless. good job!!! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Leanne

    Well all i can say is wow.
    This poem had such an impact on me, the wording used was great, you really painted a picture.
    Its a sad topic as this happens all over the world too often. You touched on something very serious and very sad but you wrote it well.
    The flow threw me off a little but overall it was a great poem to read and i'll look forward to reading more of your poems in the future.
    Well done :)

  • 17 years ago

    by ŘÅÇĦ♥

    I like the theme of your poem. Here's what needs to be fixed. Every start of a new line should be capitalized. You don't have to but it would be nicer with shortened lines.

    I didn't get this part. "I was the one without the makes, who never had no money, and that was kinda lucky cause you would've took them of me." What's the makes? and instead of using no money say any money. and maybe use from instead of, of.

    Just some thoughts. But over all I liked it. exspecially the first part. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by ♥•oOo Nikki oOo•♥©

    I Loved It...Words Really Are Lethal, And I Can Relate To This Poem Again As Well Because I Remember Growing Up Vividly Never Feeling Like I Was Good Enough...This Touched Me...Your Talent Is Obvious And I Cant Wait To Read More From You

    *Hugs&All My Love*
    5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

  • 17 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    Excellent poem, very sad and heartfelt write, full of heartache and abuse, neglect, anger , but well written . You expressed your feelings very well and did a great job of it, wording was good and so was the flow, all in all great job. your friend Tracy dean 5/5

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