This poem was very descriptive. The word choice was great, and it flowed well, with only one or two parts where it seemed rough

A counting off
Timed reprieves
A last regret
Bloody sleeves

Those would have to be my favorite lines! =)

Keep it up! 5/5

WEll I am really loving the way you wrote in a thematic way

the fourth line of each para is gr8

my fav para would be

A blinking gaze
Reminding eyes
An untold truth
Beyond those lies

the other good thing about the poem is that you have started, given it direction and ended it as well.
YOu must keep writing
5/5
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You write this genre of poetry very well, once again I was amazed but the imagery the words put into my head. As I read each line I could see it all playing out like a movie. Once again excellent job 5/5 keep up the fantastic work GG23

Aww i really like this, the flow was utterly amazing! you have serious talent here girly! and it was full of emotion! truly written from the heart! wow! :o]