This is a really good poem so far!
i love it
5/5

I really like this poem ssooo good cant wait to read it when its finished x

Great start! its going to be amazing when its done!

Hmmm..may not be finished but its beautiful so far. you've got talent, make sure you dont waste it and keep writing!
nuff luv xx

I like it! It sounds amazing the way it is! The flow and the words were purly wonderful! Your poetic talent awes me! I love it! Let me know when you get it finished so I can read the rest.

~Morgan~

The flow is very nice. Seems to roll along. The rhymes are good. Even though its not finished its still very well constructed. Hope to read the finished version soon : )

Awesome job so far. I can't wait for the rest of it. I gave it a 5 so far.

Wow ur not even done with it and already it is amazing......i cant wait to read the rest:)

Great work,I can't wait until your done it!

This is my favourite part,
"A beautiful girl with gorgeous eyes
a hidden world
of hurt and lies

A beautiful smile to hide the pain
living life
with nothing to gain

A pitiful future with dreams of tomorrow
embracing the world
with arms of sorrow

The rotting flesh of a beautiful life
all once seemed
so delicate and nice

A beautiful girl submerged in blood
hitting the floor
with a final thud

A precious soul that didn't last
a gorgeous girl
who's life had passed"

yep, the whole entire thing was amazing. i wouldn't change a thing.

Amazing i love it even more now thats its done....i think ur one of the best sad poem writers on here...i cant wait to see more of ur poems 5^5:)

This is my favorite one..so far. I could really picture this sad and lonely girl.Bravo!..5/5

Brit

This poem is really beautiful.

Wow this one was amazing ^_^ loved the flow and the rhyme scheme. Beautiful write, keep up the greatness.
love muches -Cutie

I love the last lines, reminds me of how much people suffer and how many suicides there are and people not knowing what went wrong in their lives because they never once asked what was wrong. excellent poem, excellent.

Well done , very meaningful with a sad ending 5/5

This was one of my favorites...i absolutly love it. it's amazing

Well done! you should be really really proud!

Wow...I really like it! :]

This poem is short..but beautifully written. i love the emotion portrayed here..it's very real and deep. i loved reading this poem. great job! =]