Really good very sad but osm write

-laura-

Thats so sweet.
Great poem

Sweet and well written. Like Mandy said the connection between your longing for the person in the poem and the wolfs need for the moon has a pretty powerful message. I also liked the moon/eclipse comparison. Good job.

I loved it very much, keep it up:):)

i will give ya 5/5:):)

khuloodan:)
smile all the time:)

I agree with everybody else when it comes to the grammer.It would make this poem SOOOO much better if you would correct the grammer in this poem.But other then that I didn't see anything else that you could really fix.Umm..it would be better if you used more vivid vocabulary.I still give it a 5/5 though because of the emotion that you did put into it.^-^

<3Amber

As I'm too lazy to repeat what has already been said, I'll just say I agree with Jordan and Jess on this one. Very poor. Try again.