I really like it...n i think u should too...its got quite an interesting title tho...i love it! I never woulda thot 2 name it that...REALLY good job and i think u should write more poems like this! The first and last satnzas were my favorite!
Kaylee

I thought it was kool...my honest opinion,keep up the good work ^_^

Wow..really good I love that it's a vampire. Honestly vampires are the coolest things ever! And this seemed like a romantic novel I've read "sex and the single vampire" but you do have talent and for your first piece like this it was really quite good nice work!
5/5
kaila

Really like this poem. Very fast-paced which I feel is different to most of your other work, maybe that's why you're not sure if you like it? Could maybe do with a little more emotion. But overall, another great write =) xXx

Wow this is really good...especially for your first time writing something like this..if i didnt know any better i'd say you write alot of stuff like this..thats how good it is... theres just one thing that i'd suggest changing... the first stanza has a different rhyming pattern than the rest of the poem.. maybe you should change the rhyming to match the rest of the poem..but thats just a suggestion..its still an amazing poem.5/5

I like it a lot, i love the vampire thing, reminds me of this great book.

I love it u should write more like it its great very hotttt.

Its an awesome vampire lust peom!
I love it!
Your great with this type of writing!

U won 1st place in my contest with this poem. so I don't need to say how much I like it but I'll do it any way this poem is awesome, excellent job

I thought this was wonderful! :) I really like the Twilight series and this poem made me think of those books. The only thing I would comment on is, in the first stanza, the first two lines rhymed (as did the last two) and for the rest of the poem just the 2nd and 4th lines rhymed. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but it didn't really matter. Your poem was great!