Hello Friend

by luv Shelbz luv   Jun 21, 2007


Hello Friend
I see you all alone
It looks like you could loan
A smile to everyone about
Otherwise we would doubt
you kindness and thoughtfulness
Even though it's none of our business
We judge too early
And get to know too late
Friend, why can't you be
As different as you are with me
What's wrong with you friend
You act like someone should attend
To your heart that's breaking
As others pass without making
An attempt to say hello
They don't even bellow
The words you wish to hear
It's like they don't even care
About your life or ideas
They don't even stand near your areas
I'm sorry to say goodbye to you
But with my friends I am due
Goodbye friend

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  • 17 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I loved the poem.
    it was short.. but good.
    it rhymed really well.
    I'm pretty sure I've commented all of your poems.
    lols.
    xoxo
    --CHelsey

  • 17 years ago

    by Rose not your average

    This poem could be better, but it was farly good you made it flow well and it was cute and sad at the same time

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    To be honest, this is a good piece. I like the wordings and the rhyming lexis but I found forced rhymes also. I think you can make it better. Ok juct correct the bloomer in this line

    "Even though it's know of our business" it must be none/know. OK Tc

    Fsams

  • 17 years ago

    by X2892

    This poem was kinda good n the flow kinda bad, i give it a 4/5

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