I like the emotion. It's very nice... I think you have a good poem going there!

Great poem!
My favourite part was,
"just for that moment
the sun stops shinning
and the water on the flower stopped drowning."
I thought the ending was great, it gave the poem a little extra "oomph". 5/5.

Wow such a good poem!! It had a lot of emotion in it, and the flow was great. Keep up the good work : ) 5/5