by Nathan Turner Jun 21, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
The way I'm feeling now I just want to see you, hold you, kiss you. I know I can't now, I doubt I ever will again, I'm sorry I caused you such unintentional pain. |
by Aimee Dawn
I like that you aren't afraid to let the readers know your grief, but I would make it a bit more flowing. Overall I really liked it. :) |
by Tom Swart
Very true emotions layed out for all to see. Each thought is a pain but also a badge that will lend itself to better days ahead. Keep trucking man and may you find peace. Nice words - don't let your pen sleep for long. |
by PygmyPuff
Wow, its such a nice theme, I can really understand why you feel the way you do. My only criticism is that it goes so fast because there arent any designated pauses where the reader can reflect before they go on. |
Wow, This is amazing! I know exactly how you feel. 5/5! |
True emotion honesty can show through your words 5/5 |