Wow, this is so great, honestly you have done a great job, i love the wondering through out the poem and the way you ended the poem with a simple question, that is what true poetry is all about, keep it up dear. you are really a talented poet.
a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

I would love to here this with the tune and all great job

I like how you took the title and made it your own. This was definitely not what I had in mind, but it's better. Great job on this song. It's fresh. There are simple little errors though, and I'm being nice enough to tel you considering this affects your placing in the contest. Change he to He, and whatever little errors you find.

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5/5.

How poignant. Glad to see Ms. Sheena writing about a poem in regards to Faith. It seems to me that the subject, in the midst of turmoil and disdain, in the midst of doubts and uncertainties, feels directionless in life, yet maintains a charming confidence to the Most High. Lovely work. =] 5/5

Oh, I really like this. It definitely isn't what I was expecting. From the title, you'd never have guessed that this was about faith/religion, which was a refreshing and interesting treat.

"If we step lightly, the treading will become a burden we cannot want to bare,
But there's something about the twinkling of the stars that promises us He'll be there."

^ That was [beautiful].

I also love how you ended it with two questions, it leaves your readers thinking about what you wrote; it makes an impact.

I see that these are song lyrics... but they are hard to follow. Perhaps because I don't know the beat :/

We'll ask God for His hand in the inevitable force of life, but He returns,
You have used we'll here, therefore you should use He'll.

If we step lightly, the treading will become a burden we cannot want to bare,

we cannot want to bear does not go well here. Perhaps you could say instead that we will not want to bear OR that we do not want to bear.

It was my pleasure to review your poems. I hope that I have been a help and have not offended in any way :-D