Great write cant wait to read the next part5/5

That is really in your face. I mean awesome! It is like the stalkee side to the stalking situation. great job. Hurry and finish so I can rate! lol

I think the biggest problem I saw in this piece was there was no transition in the ideas first you were talking about a guy that hurt you then you said you were with another guy. I had way too many thoughts and too little connection for those thoughts Plot121

Great job. I agree with Tara ^^^. Keep up the good work though.

You took my hand and led me away
Together forever you said that day

Fave lines ^^^^^^^^

When you are writing something try to stick with the one idea, if you have a whole heap of thoughts in your head, just try to stay on the same path with the poem, but over all, great write. 5/5

I loved your poem. that was great job. there is something i want to discuss that you were talking about a guy and i was realy enjoying while reading your poem than you have talked about another guy. it made me confuse a bit. but although it was nicely panned. and i know you realy understand the right meaning of love. and i haven oticed that you have talent.

i am giving you 5/5
takecare
hope for the best.

Ok, well i thought it was
pretty good
but there were parts
when you were rhyming
and it seemed forced

it needed to flow a little
bit better
but other wise
good wreite
5/5

I was quite puzzled by this piece, whereas I did dig up its concept. Not too bad, though.

It was very well written, it flowed well, words used created good imagery, a great piece.
love Tara-Kay
x

Sweetness, that was awesome and really good.

The flow was very good. This seemed to fit nicely together and read very smooth. It is a gret release when we can finally say the dreaded good-bye; even when we do not want too...

--Sher

I love this poem... wow... your writtings are amazing!

I think this is one of your best... 5/5

This is my favourite so far. this was beautifully written, and holds so much beauty and elegance within the written words. the only thing i didn't like was some parts rhymed and some didn't. it throws off the flow. also try and extend your vocabulary to add in more depth. apart from that, i loved this piece.

Great poem! I love your work 5/5
xx love