I think its good but your forcing the rhyming to much there

Good poem i like the line "you said you loved me, liar" that i found was powerful good job and thx for the comment

keenan

I agree with lovebites the rhyming and freestyle kind of mixed it was a little hard to follow but it did pack a powerful message

Lots of emotion-love it 5/5

<3Amber

Could have slacked of on the ryming but it was still an amazing poem! you have your own style and you can really tell the message!

This was good...the rhyming was a little forced..something just wasnt right about it.. and maybe you should seperate it and put it into stanzas..but thats just a suggestion.

Aw so sad.... the title was pretty though. :) 5/5

There was some really nice vocab towards the end there. Great emotion here, it made for a wonderful poem.

marcella

~I like this one!! Great Job!~

It was good but like a few other people have said it sounds forced i still gave you 5/5 for trying

Its a good poem.
Really it is.
I hate writing little short comments.. But there is really only one word to describe it.. "good"! it really is.
keep it up.
xoxo
--Chelsey