What My Life has Come to 2

A great addition from the first one.
I loved it.
yet again you are a wonderful writer.
keep it up.
xoxo
--CHelsey

I give it a three. The idea is good but it's a little inconsistant going from Dreams to dream at night
to
The corner where I shivered
That sad part seems like it should be in it's own seperate little stanza. Since it's not rhyming I wished it would be a little more visual but there wasn't really much to visulize. The idea is great though. Be more specific with what the things to live for are.

This was very good i think you could have done better though but it was still great! nice job!

I Love this poem.. Its a bit inspirational.. The Title is also catchy and a bot misleading and I like that. I was looking for something bad, you know waht your life has come to. So I love the turn around. This my fav stanza
"What my life has come to
Is a life
Full of things to live for
Dreams to dream at night
The corner where I shivered
Is blocked with more important things"
I also like ur choice of words "My heart, instead of combustion, is full of love"good job

I Love this poem.. Its a bit inspirational.. The Title is also catchy and a bot misleading and I like that. I was looking for something bad, you know waht your life has come to. So I love the turn around. This my fav stanza
"What my life has come to
Is a life
Full of things to live for
Dreams to dream at night
The corner where I shivered
Is blocked with more important things"
I also like ur choice of words "My heart, instead of combustion, is full of love"good job