That was a good poem keep it up you did a really great write
laura

Sorri to say but ur other poem was better and yet this poem is still awesome lol.

Well though this is your first poem but you have written it very well.This poem is good enough.Your first poem itself went so good.Each stanza went very well.

Your love for me shines in your green eyes,
They can no longer hide your countless lies.
Your fingers lightly graze my delicate skin,
Making me forget your faults within.

This stanza is very well written.this is a beautiful penned poem.
All the best
And take care.

For a first poem submitted, it's a lot better than my old ones (:

Your fingers lightly graze my delicate skin,
Making me forget your faults within.
`Ahh a feeling that we all meet in our lives . Love that .

THis was simply nicely penned .
Nothing left to say .
..__MiNDYY

Being to short the last kind was so good that i gonna remember it for my life.

Being too short the last line was so good that i gonna remember it for my life.

I reckon you are gifted, you were born with this talent and as you get older, it will really do wonders. keep writing
xxxx

I loved it

i think you have a real knack
for writting and i am waiting for
some more submissions
of yours

great job,

5/5

I don't like it. Last stanza is great but others are bad. I won't rate it but I know that you can write much better.

People, akin to this 'beautiful liar', brought such dread in this world. But then and again, aren't we, as humans, beautiful liars as well?

Reading this piece brought into play countless of questions in my mind. Thanks for sharing it with us, with me.

`Marian