Alone as you know

by Loved In Hell   Jun 23, 2007


I am missing a piece of me
the piece that is there for wanting
unhappiness and lonliness
seems to always be there taunting

I am missing that touch
the one that makes you feel warm
no matter who it is
I just dont wanna feel torn

please someone come
to rescue me
before the darkness
completely takes over me

I dont wanna be
only there and alone
I miss the love
I miss having a real home

I would love to have
a place to fit in
arms to hold me
when the ice gets to thin

I am here
alone in my room
in the corner
dead I assume

can someone save me
from this life of pain
only to find myself
so that soon I can regain

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  • 17 years ago

    by Michelle18

    This poem is good...not your best that i've read but i still like it...i think the beginning was kinda "off" ..but you ended it very well.

    good job. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Riley

    Netspeak bugs me but I loved the poem :)
    It was nice to read.
    But yeah I agree with Cella Bella, the flow was a bit shaky in the second stanza, but you pulled it together really quickly.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    The flow was a little off in the second stanza. The rest was really good. Wonderful read!Another 5/5

    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I loved the last stanza because I think it is so important for us to find ourselves before we look to others for help. Excellent job as always 5/5 GG23

  • 17 years ago

    by Debbie

    How poignant. This truly was quite beautiful and emotive write. Perhaps applying certain punctuations--in my humblest opinion--will help enhance the flow and guide the reader throughout rather effortlessly. This piece, nonetheless, took a hold of my attention and interest as well, despite the fact that I usually am not keen of such themes. Thanks for sharing. =] ~Debbie

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