I thought this poem was simply amazing. So well written. You're very good. Forgive me for asking, but how did you come up with such an idea for a poem? Personal experiences? Someone else's? A tv show? Or do these ideas just comes to you? You have wonderful talent, and I wouldn't change a thing. I imagine that it must have taken awhile to write. If not, then I am even more impressed.

Wow Vanessa this is superb. I really liked this piece and though it is a bit long, it kept me interested throghout the poem. Thats your quality dear. This poem is great with lexical quality and good word choice. 5/5 all the way.
Tc

Omg, it was beautifully written, the way you expressed it, it was so sad. did it really happen?
i am so sorry if it did with the shooting bit. well it was awesome. 5/5

Whoa!!! the emotion in this poem is just so raw!!!...i swear i could feel tears filling my eyes!!!...u hv an amazing talent vanessa never stop writing!!!

5/5 bree x

Uhm. Wow. =/.
This made me feel empty inside.
Not that it was bad; it was amazing.
The story just flew together..
You are seriously.. a wonderful poet.
The emotion displayed throughout..
The depth and meaning..
Simply.. lovely. This will be on my
favorite poems category.
Good work and Good luck.
Overall Rating: 5.0/5

THat was one of the best poems
i have ever read
there was so much emotion in it
and it must have taken
a while to write it

i was no joke
sitting here crying my
eyes out

and my tears are still
showering
the key board

1,000,000,000,000,000,000/5, lol

its what u deserve

Very powerful poem. its really moving and emotional. i really like this poem. keep up the good work!