ok... this one is pretty scary, but after some thought, i finally get the meaning from it. See if you other folks can get it too
Aken Sol

I love how you write... I love the rhythm and flow..and the non-rhyminess of them... (do you ever rhyme.... I can't recall any at the moment, but you have a LOT of poems) You know, sometimes a poem lends itself to rhyming, and it sticks out like a sore thumb if it doesn't, Like:
Roses are red
Violets are blue
Sugar is sweet
and so are puppies

sure, it'scute, maybe even funny, but it just sounds wrong! Your unrhyminess (like my made up word?) just works! I love it!

I went to read your oldest stuff, just to see how much you have changed in writing. I can see a big difference, well at least with this poem. The language was simple and easy to understand, your later stuff are more complexed. You wrote from an average angst teenager's point-of-view. A good poem.

You have a great style
Love the poem
Very unique

Ithink i get most of it.

"I shot you in the face;
Made a hole in your skull."

He killes this person, shoot em in the head.

"A million years worth of
Sin and deceit"

Here it talks about how he shall always remember what he did. and how it shall haunt him.

Creep in, pouring.
It burns you hard,
The hate that is steel
Tempered into my fingertips;"

This talks about the gun and what impact it has on the dead man. How the gun is a thing made of hate and death, sorrow and misery.

"And my fingertips flay away
At you back,
Rake your skin,
Until we all know

You were a hollow man.
The empty used up shell
Of what might have been
A sugarcane bullet."

Not sure I get this part.....can any1 help? Hey can I use this poem for my report im doin? For english...i have to get a bunch of poems and summarize em..Ill include ur username I gess..or can u message ur real name 1st and last. thx 5/5