Wow as you said, in a short verse you said alot. a poem with so much meaning and romance in it, it was showing the beauty of love... great job dear.

a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

Short full of meaning perfect...lol lik mi cmment haha 5/5

I've read some really powerful haikus and yours is deffanitly among them. 5/5

Ravyn

I really don't like short poems but I love the imagery in it, great vocab. Fantastic work!

5/5!

Great haiku, beautifully written.
You created wonderful imagery with so little words.
Well done
5/5

Wow I felt the sweetness in this masterpiece hunny
It was so touching even though it is so short
And you wrote it really great that you put meanings to only 3 lines
Take care elaine
Hope to see you soon,
Your friend,
Laura

I loved this piece although this is really a senyru. Haikus only refer to nature and so on.

Other then that this piece was beautiful I loved the rare emotion which you portrayed in such few lines. Honestly a heartfelt sweet piece of poetry. A good read and im sure an even better write. ~mel

Wow, very nice. i give you major kudos because i cannot write a decent haiku to save my life ^_^" good job

Wow. great job. why didn't you tell me you wrote another poem? have you showed jake it? nice job puttng so much meaning in it! :)

So simple and sweet. V creative and well adhered to the rules. tc

The imagery is great but the flow just doesnt seem right, it may need some working on. the emotions are deep and meaningful. =] good work
.x

It was beautifully written, haiku's are meant to be about nature but it was good, 5/5

Aren't Haiku's about nature? oh well 5/5
really good why would anyone give it anything less?

This was a lovely poem. Indeed, I also find it quite endearing and delightful to read as well. For a short piece, mutual sentiments emanated by your words rather effectively have revealed volumes of meanings. By the way, I think the apostrophe in the line, "Tear's fall from my eyes." is unnecessary. A joy to read, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing. ~Marian

I love this...every time I have tried to write a senryu, I find it difficult...but here you make it look so easy...you managed to pack both imagery and depth into this short form, and I thought the ending line was very sweet.

I really enjoyed this little poem. You wrote it beautifully. It would still be great if it was just the first and last lines. I like how you packed so much meaning in so few words.
5/5

marcella

It was perfect :-) i really like it a lot, 5/5 keep it up

A beautiful and so very heartfelt love poem. Once more, this piece was dripping with emotions that you truely felt. Once more, you've written an amazing piece

5/5

Very interesting. It isn't your best poem but it has great imagery. Wording is simple but you created atmosphere with just a few words which is incredible. 5/5

Awww.. that is so sweet that you made this poem for Jake, Elaine =) He has no idea how lucky he is to have you!

Even though this piece is short, I can still relate to it... You're hurt and crying, and your loved one just doing something simple like wrapping their arms around you makes everything feel okay again.

5/5 Girl, keep it up! <3 <3

~Loveless Nights~ aka ~Kayla~