How sad.. I thought this was a really good write.. Your a good poet.. keep up the good work. 5/5

Ok, i thought it was very sad, but a great poem.The only thing was that in this stanza...

"No smile will creep on my face,
When the sun dies,
By the nights darkness,
When the Moon opens the darkness of my mind."

you use darkness in both of the last lines

and again in this stanza...

So nobody will know,
"Nobody will care.
Too late to open up,
Too late for people to care
Just stuck in my room..
In my little corner.."

you used the word "care" twice and it just seemed a little weird.But still a great write, keep it up, 5/5

Ok, i thought it was very sad, but a great poem.The only thing was that in this stanza...

"No smile will creep on my face,
When the sun dies,
By the nights darkness,
When the Moon opens the darkness of my mind."

you use darkness in both of the last lines

and again in this stanza...

So nobody will know,
"Nobody will care.
Too late to open up,
Too late for people to care
Just stuck in my room..
In my little corner.."

you used the word "care" twice and it just seemed a little weird.But still a great write, keep it up, 5/5

Ok, i thought it was very sad, but a great poem.The only thing was that in this stanza...

"No smile will creep on my face,
When the sun dies,
By the nights darkness,
When the Moon opens the darkness of my mind."

you use darkness in both of the last lines

and again in this stanza...

So nobody will know,
"Nobody will care.
Too late to open up,
Too late for people to care
Just stuck in my room..
In my little corner.."

you used the word "care" twice and it just seemed a little weird.But still a great write, keep it up, 5/5

Sad poem, i've been there.

The best way to resolve all sadness
To banish the light from you darkened soul
Is to open the blinds
And let the light poor through

Dont keep yourself shut away, alone. IT only makes things worse. You feel alone not because others dislike you, but because you are isolating yourself. Things may be looking down but they will only get worse if you don't be a bit optimistic. I know its not always the easiest thing to do, especialy if you dont have someone to help you through it. Just don't go do something stupid like killing yourself, no matter how alone you feel, there is always someone who cares about you.

Woops, i forgot to actualy comment on the poem :P. It was so good i started getting distracted. Sorry. Its amazing, simple, effective and touching. Excellent flow, good word usage, just overall amazing. Great job. A piece of art to be proud of.

Hey chica!! it was really good you have come an amazingly long way then what you first started!!! keep up the good work
**showers you with stars**
Keep up the good work
Love ya bunches
*~Amber Dawn~*