This one is pretty good.. it could use some more work, but it has great potential!! i like it, it explains how one person can change ur life! great symbolism! :o]

I liked the meaning behind this poem it was quite interesting and your symbolism is truely great. To me though the flow seemed to lack, expecially in the first stanza. It got better to me futher down but the first stanza is what really needs to grasp the reader and the flow just didn't do that for me. Overall a simple piece which was pretty good. Well done. ~Mel