"curse my envious self
that wants the moon and stars
curse the ones who are lucky enough
for being who they are"

Sometimes I would give anything to be someone else, other than myself. But you realise that the life you are leading is yours and the life others are leading is theirs. You can try to change who you are, but deep down you will never be able to escape the real you and your life. Loved this poem, it had a great flow and great meaning.

Hey hope u don't curse me for being happy with my life right now but any way this is a good poem everyone wants to b sum 1 else at sum time but if u were them then u would want ur old life back b/c until u know every thing about what goes on in their life u will only see the them they want u to see

check to some of mine (espeacially recipe for pain)

First of all. This poem doesn't deserve to be down voted! Flow was smooth, I like the theme in the poem I think you did a great job!

curse the birds that sleep so high
it's as if they're in a sky of sea
^^My favorite lines!

Keep writing my friend.

5/5!

Interesting title, the whole poem interests me especially the first stanza. my favourite stanza however is:

curse the moon, that shines so bold
that no one can reach out and touch
curse the fact that i can not fly
for it's a skill i want so much

i've often thought about that. well done xoxo

Brilliant. Flow was smooth and you could easily catch on to the beat of the poem. Excellent job : )

Aww this was a well written poem. You got a clear image across. great read
well done.. 5/5
xxx

One word, WOW. i thought it was amazingly thought of and the picture you brought to my mind was so strong. 5/5

curse the birds that sleep so high
it's as if they're in a sky of sea
curse the life I'll never have
because i am just me

loved that stanza^^

'Liking' does not have an 'e.' I really think you should work on your capitalization. Do you intend to leave your "I"s lower-cased? The lack of capitalization seems almost lethargic.

This line is lacking something: 'because i am just me'
^ Perhaps me is too basic of a rhyme.

Again, besides the minor faults, this poem is a pleasure to read. Most of the words you chose are SPOT ON. Great imagery; the first stanza drew me in immediately.

5/5

Ah, one more thing. You tend to use the word, 'so,' a lot.

Amazing.

I loved the repitition, it was effective in getting your message across. The flow was flawless and the message was clear. The last stanza was a perfect way to end the poem.

Well done *5/5*

That was again, another amazing write! You have a lot of talent! I like your choice of words, and the repetition made the message more powerful.

Well writen 5/5

Great work, this was a really pleasuable piece to read. The repetition had a great effect, and the flow was flawless. A good message the whole way through, and every line was so captivating...5/5 from me, I thought this was very orginal. Take care, keep writing, always and forever...