Very well written. Love it.

I liked the first two self-examining verses, but then it went more out there and I wasn't feeling it at all. It seems like you were almost about to confess some deep inner longing of your soul, but chickened out at the last minute. Resist these urges in the future. Just write.

Wow, great dark poem. It really impressed me, imagery is superb. 5/5 keep up.