by Monica AKA Mika Jul 1, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Lying in bed just waiting for your call, |
by Javier
This has got to be my favorite poem out of all the ones that i read so far, i love the way you started off every new stanza with the last word you used in the stanze before it, your great! |
by Melpomene
You seem to be able to work really well with emotions although when it comes to the structure and the flow they seem a bit off. None the less again the emotions that were portrayed made up for it. I'm sure many people can relate to this poem so you didn't just write this for you or your boyfriend you wrote it for many other individuals who would also be feeling the same way in a certain situation. A good effort. ~mel |
Once again, I like what's written. It comes from the heart, and leaks desperation, desire, guilt and love. I really like that mix of emotions in there. |
This poem is full of hurt. it flowed very nicely. although i was a bit confsed at times with the way i had to read it, it was still a great poem. 5/5 |
by JaMeS
Nice touching wording too it was just a good poem all in all :) keep it up monica/mika... |