This rather was a fine emotional outburst, raving about a romantic tragedy of inadvertent betrayal and infidelity. Losing a cherished someone by one's alleged mistake certainly is dreadful, I dare say. I only have complaints about its craggy structure and misuse of punctuations. Perhaps breaking it into stanzas will somehow augment the poem's flow? Hm, it's no big deal, really. It actually is a fine, expressive piece of writing. Thanks for sharing. ~Marian

Hey,
Well you started this poem off by saying soemthing that many people can just imagine themselves doing. And the next line seems to expand on this as when people dont call them it may be becuase theyve done something wrong. Then you go on to kinda of tell this story, like a narrative poem. Its got emotion in it, and this love poem is something that.. well many epople can relate to. You used rhyming couplets throughout the poem, your vocabulary was quite simple and easy to undersatand. Your structure kinda put me off this, i suggest you split it up into stanza's or something. I also suggest you use a more varied punctuation. But yeah not a bad read. Keep writing! x

This poem reflects very well a regret over a seemingly real threat to a relationship
The sentiment is very touching and the words seem so sincere

I thought it was great. awesomely written. you have talent. it was so emotional. and i just loved it, the way you put the whole poem together was just great 5/5

Nice touching wording too it was just a good poem all in all :) keep it up monica/mika...

This poem is full of hurt. it flowed very nicely. although i was a bit confsed at times with the way i had to read it, it was still a great poem. 5/5

Once again, I like what's written. It comes from the heart, and leaks desperation, desire, guilt and love. I really like that mix of emotions in there.

It was a good poem. I enjoyed the read.

You seem to be able to work really well with emotions although when it comes to the structure and the flow they seem a bit off. None the less again the emotions that were portrayed made up for it. I'm sure many people can relate to this poem so you didn't just write this for you or your boyfriend you wrote it for many other individuals who would also be feeling the same way in a certain situation. A good effort. ~mel

This has got to be my favorite poem out of all the ones that i read so far, i love the way you started off every new stanza with the last word you used in the stanze before it, your great!