This poem looked neglected... I really liked it though. It was different in it's form, but the story within it was portrayed really well. My favorite lines were

"He put on wings,
They ripped them off and gave him suffering.
Angels watch him fall eternally."

I use a lot of wing metaphors in my writing, so it struck me... It brings back a lot of old memories... Oh well... I really like your writing and I love reading it!

5/5

~Ravyn