4 Of My 6 Sucide Attempts

Hmmm i'll take your word for it! i dont think i would want to drink bleach..eww lol
and i think i would rather not kill myself by drinking bleach..do you know how painful that would be! galding your throat..but eh..in the end you're dead..but whatever!...lol

As Lyndsy said, it is an origional idea. I liked it, the end made me laugh a little, for after saying how you couldn't stand it and you threw up advising to the reader not try the cocktail seemed kind of funny, redundant. I think that it could have had a little more substance.
I thought the poem was good nonetheless.

I agree with you Lyndsy... its not quite right is it... oh well, ill work on it later :)

It's definitely an original idea. there seems to be something missing though. But other than that I liked it a lot. 4/5 as well.

The description was great but you need transition and i think you could have added to the poem just my personal opion 4/5 maybe u can read one of mine.