Wow, powerful poem, with great wording. The atmosphere in the poem is so dark, and the whole piece is excellently written.
Well done 5/5

Very deep in detail. i loved how you put it together, the imagry in this was amazing. good work. :)

Again, a wonderfully enchanting contribution to the world of poetry. so beautiful. i havn't been on here in so long, so u'll have to forgive me for not keeping up with your prolific style of writing. i'll catch up another day, another time. maybe when i'm not about to fall asleep on the keyboard. i love you, and i miss u. until the morrow... goodbye.

-snoo

Wonderfull ^^ !! 5/5

I liked the second to last phrase the best, the words:'crimson mouths chapped' fit in really good with the poem and really gave a firm idea of what was going on. btw, you might want to change it so : 'plater' is spelled 'platter'. just to tell you.
but 5/5
gabriella

This...is beautifully written.
This poem just speaks to me..I don't even know what to say..
I love everything about this..the depth and emotion in this are overhwhelming, flow is perfect, imagery wonderfully portrayed...beautifully and elegantly written.

I loved this poem it has great imagery and it is beautifully written there is a lot of emotion in this and i love how you worded it :) 5/5

--emz--

I like this poems lots. the flow is easy to read 5/5