Amazing poem, truly touching and filled with powerful emotions. You're really talented writer.
Every stanza in this piece is great and the subject is excellent.
Great work, 5/5

Excellent imagery...vivid descriptions and some choice words. The first stanza really sets the tone giving the negative aspect that's heightened throughout and maintained rather than forgotten. Truly an awesome write. The imagery is extremely effective in this write.
~Faith-less

Haha oh dear. when i read your title i thought it said (father) and i was like this doesn't make no sense! but then i re-read it. haha

this was a good poem. i liked how you put it together, the beggining never gave away the ending making me want to read on. good work

Woooh that was a grey image but wow great words so powerful =)

Noelle

Your choice of words was amazing. It was put together very nicely and I enjoyed this piece as well. A chilling and powerful poem to say the least.

Good until the end. I didn't like the last stanza. It didn't flow so nice and I just don't like political read lol. But a five out of five for the rest. :)

I love it because i can visualize what you wrote and how you feel very touching and it's great how you relate things to life and nature i love it

What the hell are u talking about it does not have nothing to do with your father

All that can be said is wow...

as I was reading this.. I could feel my heart beating faster.... purely amazing... =]

5/5
xx