This is a great poem its so dark and sad but very deep great job!!! |
Beautiful . There's darkness in it, yet a pretty hope . I normally don't like poems that use so many rhymes in one stanza, because it normally doesn't work or sound right . |
by Kristina
Wow this was such a great poem. i think you did a wonderful job on writing it. it was simply amazing. keep on writing 5/5 |
by firexdancer
Wow. this was a really beautiful poem, so sad and hopeless feeling, yet strong in it's own way.... but beautiful, and the flow was really smooth too, 5/5 and i'm adding this to my fav's |
by Marc Ortiz
This is another beautiful piece from you, the whole poem is really powerful, it flowed nicely too, I love your choice of words, well done. |
Wow..this was a beautiul poem...u r an awesome poet |
Amazing it painted a picture in my head so ya it was great... |
That was great! it put a picture in my head nice job |
I really like this too |
by veeda
I adored this poem! Keep it up! 5/5 |
by Bre Monique
Your poems all create such amazing imagery and this one doesn't dissapoint. I also loved the rhyming style, it was quite unique 4/5 |
by amanda
That was so beautiful <3 |
by amanda
That was so beautiful <3 |
An amazing poem. |
It's beautifull. ^_^ 5/5 |
by Jenni Marie
The imagery you painted in this was beautifully done. it creates some very vivid pictures for the reader. it was like i could see everything that was happening. i thought the repetition of the first stanza as the last worked nicely. sometimes repetition can kill a poem but you pulled it of wonderfully here. managed to get your point across without being overbearing. the only thing i didn't like about this was the repeated use of "I" try eliminating some of those and you'll find the flow gets even better. |
by Samantha
Your an excellent writer!!! I love it! |
by Samantha
Your an excellent writer!!! I love it! |
by Laurenf7
Wow! great poem x |
by lindsey
That was awesome...i loved it, the ending sorta reminded of how this guy i likes keeps going over to my best friend when he gets mad at me...but OFF the subject....what was great and i loved it and its going right on my favorite list, lol, keep it up! =) |