Teria, It made me cry! I thought it was really good, such a sad piece, with so much raw emotion, the pain and sorrow of this child touched my heart.
You are so talented,
Love Tara-Kay
xx

WOW, that was a very very good poem
i loved how you made it rhyme, because
all the rhyming fit
it never seemed forced
and it also flowed well
and i just loved the concept
and

"For the child once lost has found a home..
in the ground below and more alone. "

favorite stanza ^^

particualy because its the ending and it really
tied everything together

5/5

Beautiful with nice rhymes, the flow is just flawless with overflowing meanings. I really liked your style of writing. Keep it up
5/5 all the way
Tc

Ohh this is so sad. i have to agree with one of the commenters above me. the final lines were simply beautiful. well done. xoxo

Wow, what a happy ending lol!
exististance without meaning
is hardly an existance at all isnt it?

To find herself in wondrous smother.
[[I don't like the line.]]

Anyways.
I like this, but I didn't. It didn't drag me in. Maybe it's, again, because I didn't feel the emotion in it. To me, that's important.
I liked the story you were telling, but it just didn't grab me.
And for some reason all the .... bother me. Maybe that's only me though.
Sorry, Teria.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5