by So Wrong its Right Jul 3, 2007
category :
Friendship, family /
best friends
When i see his face |
by Melpomene
This first part to me way way better then this one. Again you need to captalize your "I's" in my opinion. I did like the word choice though simple and effective. A good effort.~mel |
This is such a beatiful second part |
by Lozbi
Nawww.. That's beautiful. The ending is what made me go "nawwww" lol. very nice poem. |
by Nix
Third stanza is bad. You should not write this part two. First was so much better. Maybe me and you have different views on poetry. Sorry but I don't like it. |
I've been in a similar situation, and I know the feeling. |