I think that you have a good idea with the poem and that if you made it a bit longer and put some more stanza's in it would be a lot better. It's still a great poem as is though 5/5 GG23

I dont even know what to say about it..
It was a great poem like all your other ones..
5/5.

This is a good poem...it could probably use more description..but it still an enjoyable poem to read..5/5