I think that was near flawless . An over-written about subject, but you wrote about it beautifully - I feel .

He knew not of his treachery,
Oblivious to what he could have had.
`I loved those lines, truly . I don't know why x)

The first stanza was my favourite, and the way you ended, I feel was absolutely great . The flow at a couple of points got rocky, but went right back on point . The rhymes were nicely chosen, and it just rocked ;D

Nicely done, dear .
..__MiNDYY