I think you shouldnt hange it, its how you felt and at the time this is how it came out - et it be :)

good job xxx

It doesnt suck, but there could have been some chnages to make the timing better, but still i liked it and the concept alot, 5/5

Gr8 poem!!!!!! really well writen!!!

I really enjoyed reading this poem, I think most people have these feelings sometimes it's just normal I guess. It's a very sad thing to feel alone in this world, amazing poem 5/5 GG23

I wouldn't change a thing.This poem is very unique in itself.I think by changing it,it would take away it's uniqueness.
The flow was a little off in some parts but the poem is still good. 5/5
Miranda

As much as you thought it sucked, it doesn't it was well written, you can see the emotions in it, it was sad, yet it was nicely done, i loved the way it is now, great work. 5/5

One of the common poems i read and it was such a cliche. but still i like it coz the emotions were there and these lines just reveal it:

"No one really cares for me.
Yes my family and friends do
But the ones whom I want
Don't even look twice at me

I just try my hardest
For someone to look at me
And make this pain disappear
But I am just invisible

Like my whole life, I have always been clear.
I don't like it anymore I want out of this nightmare
Can't tell you how much I care because I don't anymore
You tell me I am pretty, you tell me I am yours
But you lie to me and kill me, Break my heart into two.

So I end this poem on that note telling you I don't really care
Because you were there and now your not
That is the story of my life
Just trying to make it all work"

nothing more to say just o keep it up

Mind-blowing...

Good job

"You tell me I am pretty, you tell me I am yours
But you lie to me and kill me, Break my heart into two."

I can relate to this.
But I don't really get the message of this poem.
I think this poem would come out good when you revise it (:

<3