Excellent job it was very long , but it was good at the same time and thats what matters, a story is poetry, tells of how one feels and the inner thoughts in there mind ,doesn't matter what the thoughts are as long as you express it well and that you did , great job, your friend Tracy d 5/5

I loved it!! Great job!

Lovee-stunning storyy x3
5/5

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:) nice job, good poem... 5/5 (nice use of metaphor, by the way)

Wow i loved it and the description seasons 5/5 for sure

Wow, wow... greatly written piece, with so vivid and powerful descriptions through it and very good choice of words. The second stanza is my favorite. I like the flow of the whole piece, too.
Ending is also effective.
Well done!

Nice poem girl!!! Full of mystery!!!