What a Captivating write. The word choice was amazing! I just love how the peice radiated a sense of restless panic.
A gorgeous write M'dear.

Fantastic, theis piece is flowing well and the word choice is beautiful. Its well expressed and well penned. Your poem is superb with both lexical and poetic quality. Keep up the good work.

In the desire for the dreams she beholds
Only to be left broken, curled on the floor

My fav lines

I did find it hard to find a rythm but i thought that it flowed well, imagery was awesome, and the word choice was amazing.
It was sad, and i loved it very much
love Tara-Kay

Superb poem. I enjoyed reading this as the heading itself is really catching. The vocabulary used is just the best. i loved it.

Though it has an unnatural rhythm, this work is still fine on the whole. Its vividness in description is a major highlight of this piece. Very nicely done, indeed. ~Marian

"It is now too far along this dissolute road,
Unrestrained by convention or morality.
The multiple pathways have merged into but one.
This disease as explosive as dynamite,
Desensitizes what's left of normality."

^^ I love those lines.

Amazing poem, hun.
I loved how it ended so well, and began just as well. :]
Keep it up.

So she lets a tear escape the jail of her eyes

That is my fave line
nicely done i loved it!

Great word choice...amazing. really. it truly was captivating. i loved it. so sad and jsut so full of emotion. it was a beautiful read. keep up the good work...and smile because your a great poet

This poem is fantastic in so many ways, the message it shares is truly remarkable. I had a bit of a hard time finding the flow at first but I read it a second time and it went along much better. Sometimes too many large words can ruin a poem but I think this one is perfect. Great job 5/5 GG23

Hey i really like the way you write it was really beautiful.Amazing, you're one of the great poet i met!!Keep it up

I don't know what it is about your poems, but I really enjoy them. I like the feeling and uniqueness in this one. I also enjoyed the complex, yet understandable wording. This poem had me thinking throughout it. Very amazing work!!

5/5

Wow. i just started reading it and just had to read the rest, i actually read it twice. thought it was amazing, very descriptive. great imagery. 5/5