Comments : Free At Last

  • 17 years ago

    by Megamidget3

    Me again! lol. nice poem again! love your writing! but, a little problem with this one is, your syllables again. for example:
    "AS I start to hate myself,
    I realize that it's so true,
    The world wouldn't be possible,
    Without you"
    look at the last line, 3 syllables...if u look at the other 2 stanzas, it flows more with more syllables at the end to match the 2nd line...you know? im just sharing tips of what ive learned over time. take it or not. but, 5/5. great job!