Http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/dark/poems.php?id=890204

could you please do that poem for me

any how

ok, i thought it was a VERY good poem

i havent read anything else by you yet, but i loved this one

but there was on part
where it didnt rhyme

"Then splitting in two as the wax starts to fall
Creating a sensation that the world is cruel"

see, cruel and fall dont rhyme but it was still a good poem

and them in the last to lines, do and overdue

they both sound like "DO"

so it doesnt really work, but its still a good poem

5/5 well deserveed