Your poem is an awesome poem! you desribe things so well! and you put so much emosion into it!!! i loved it!!!
5/5

This is a very good poem ciao, absolutely love the flow, the last 2 lines perfect, you know this is a perfect 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!

Awe! I was like..eh, this isn't so great...but I read those last two lines and almost cried. That part was perfect; beautiful!
I can't get over those last two lines. They're perfect for the ending and fit perfectly. Nicely, nicely done.

And by the way, I wanted to tell you I think you could be a really great poet. My suggestion is that you have cliche rhymes and one you get over that, you'll be wonder (not that you already aren't great..). =] I'm just here for suggestions. =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5