Wow your poem was beautiful,very touching
Well done.
TTFN,
Wolf

Wow... thats so emotional yet still such a great poem.. incredible .. well written.

rates&comments always apprechiated
Kirsty
xx

I think you could have gone a tad farther with it, I mean - its great writing, but it lacks that UMPH..if that makes any sense - I do love your choice of words however, you used those that would capture the raw emotion and put that message through...keep up the good work!

If it is desired by the maker, this dark piece of work will have the potential to be augmented and enhanced in the future. You've got poetical lines which were rather naturally potent, I dare say; and I, furthermore, believed that by reshuffling the structure of words and phrases, you'll [re]generate a much stunning success.

Potentially compelling, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing.

Best wishes,
Marian

Very interesting poem. You created great atmosphere but you have some mistakes. You used some words more than ones and that destroys flow. Anyway first stanza is my favorite one, this poem deserves 5/5