Wow...thats all i can say. that was amazing...im not sure i could take like someone elses thought and write them so well...great job

1451435/5

Omg?! Did someone really kill your friend's Fiancée? (sp) I really feel sorry for your friend.. And it happened in front of her eyes.. :|

I can feel that even though you wrote this for your friend.. I can feel that it's important to you..

Anyway I enjoyed reading it. Just a suggestion to use more punctuations =)

Keep up the good work. And I'm really sorry for what happened :(

I liked this one it was sad but had a good enough message at the ending to make you smile again very nice work underline one of the top poems out there i think its underated!!

:'( *tear* I Love It!Keep up the good work!5/5
<3Amber

I like it...Very good again...Your a really good poet....Keep writting 5/5

Kris,

Though austerely written, the poem was carrying great weight of sorrowful sentiments, which gently stir across the page like swirling cherry blossoms in spring. The idea that one needs to move ahead through life encompasses a great Truth. It's nice to note how your poetry reflects an empathetic heart within you. God bless you and your friend.

Take care,
Marian

Very nice poem with feelings flowing well. Good word choice and the structure is great. Keep it up 5/5

Aww how tragic. =( I also have had loved people die in my life all before I am to get married. It's no easy feat to get over, but eventually you do.

The poem wass fantastic. Really good for not being the one seeing the death. It had enough description of the emotion but maybe you could go deeper. I don't know.

Suggestion:
[And I would watch you everyday]
^^I would personally take that line out. It's the only stanza (excluding the last) that has 5 lines. And it just seems kind of in the way for what you would say. But that's me. It's up to you.

Other than that, great job. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Another beautiful poem! So much emotion here, it feels very heartfelt. Again it was a very plesant read! 5/5

marcella

This is very good.
The flow was great and the emotion has showed.
I liked it a lot.
There was a lot of meaning and moral to this, great job!