This was such a sad poem, but amazingly well-written, too. It is made very easy to feel sorry for both sides of this broken relationship. I also like how there was some repetition about the eyes, and how they were misinterpreted and whatnot.

Excellent work, both of you. :)

Wow marian, this is a brilliant write from two of you.A very powerful write with deep meaning.The selection of words, flow all are just amazing.Very impressive job.

Take care
chavii.

Fcuk.
Just.
Fcuk.

Give me a moment.
Okay. I've recovered.
It's odd to wow me that much. The words were all perfectly placed and said beautifully. There is nothing wrong with this poem; everything slides off the tongue easily and I /love/ the sort of repeat of the ending lines in the stanza. Brilliant.
This is pure beauty. One of the best things I've had the pleasure...no, honour of reading on this site.

+Favorites.
And I will nominate you for the contest once it's updated and I can vote again.

Fcuk.
Just. Dman.
And you even used punctuation!
I could kiss you! Lmao!

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 100++++.5

This is a great poem .. :)

Epic.

The cumbersome sadness elicited by the charecters was hair raising. The pitch was exitable and the emotions raw and well versed. I truly enjoyed this piece, Marian.

Wow....Do u know what i liked most..about this poem.. its comes from the heart and goes through the heart..

You and Tempted did an outstanding job on this beautiful piece great chioce of words and depth, the delivery even more amazing

It was an amazingly written piece, yet so sad. i loved the words you used in you writing, just beautiful. 5/5

Such detailing.. it was amazing to read

"Blunt mistakes leading to such deceitful guise,
Devastating tragedy devised in love's disguise."

The wording was nothing short of fabulous, it kept the flow of the piece consistant yet it seemed to fresh.
I'm not doing a good job of explaining myself, lol but wow..
A superb collab
5/5
*Gem*

Wow that was a really unique work of art and it was beautifully written.I loved all the vocabulary choices and the flow remained smooth.The emotion was dense and I reall loved it.5/5

Wow this poem is just ... really spectacular.. i love it.. the emotion is so strong and portrayed so beautifully... the flow is fantastic and the word choice is excellent... the beginning really captured me i think the first two stanzas were the best.. great job 5/5

Oh wow. All I can say is just...oh wow. o.o

I LOVED this piece. It is so beautifully pieced together with the gorgeous vocab you used to exaplain and let your emotions out. Fantastic job on the vocab by the way. It is what mainly caught my eye. And the flow...oh the flow! It just seemed to fit perfectly! I didn't see any major or minor flaws in this. Great job. =) 5/5 xoox

Samantha

Whoa amazing!!! This is so good I love it so much! Your work is so good! i love them all

Wonderful, extravagant, excellent, superb.
Enough said?
Lol great imagery, lovely wording.
Overall great theme.
Just an amazing piece of art :)

Amazing.. keep it up the good work

I like this as well. It's my absolute favorite of yours, but it's still better than most others on this website. I think it was just that the rhyme scheme was a little funky. I still loved the imagery and vocabulary though. You are truly blessed with the gift of writing!

'Such tremendous confusion ripped them to shreds,
Causing both hearts to crackle and break into pieces.
From a terrible tragedy with millions of regrets,
And a mutual bond they would no longer share,
Both walked away with sorrow in their eyes... '
WOW! The words are so deep and emotional. I can relate to this stanza, even helped be realize some things. Thanks for sharing this!
5/5
*Brittney

Very beautiful and outstanding. Everything is portrayed so well and also so sad. Vocabulary was very unique. Eventhough it was long didn't loose my interest in this piece.
Flawless.
5/5