Comments : Tornado (String Haiku)

  • 17 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    Wow! What a way to describe a tornado! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    Excellent choice of words for this one cindy, i love how everything fits a perfect description without being too narrow

    "Darkness stripping light" this line was the best...very good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Liz

    I love this. It flowed so easily and perfectly. It's like I could actually see a tornado happening. Very beautiful write. 5/5

    ` Liz =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Lithium

    Short strong and powerful, great work as always cindy keep it up girl and all the best. xox sam

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Cindy dear... What a beautiful nature poems you penned here... simply yet breathtaking written! Keep them coming dear friend, keep your smiling, take care.

    "Beautiful young people are acts of nature, But beautiful old people are works of art."

    Bert.

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    You have a way with haiku. i remember your other ones, it ended up on my favourite poems.

    and this is another that is simply perfect, no one could better describe it.

    well done. 5/5 David

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    Tis a great haiku, never heard of a triple haiku called a string haiku though, love the imagery that makes this a wonderful poem, u know its a perfect 5/5 from me!!! keep up with the great styles cindy!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Debbie

    My, what a gorgeous piece about tornadoes, Miss Cindy! (^^,) The part where you stated "Deadly silence cries..." exudes, quite vividly, a rather audible sound with me--either shedding tears or screaming.

    I loved it! 'twas my real pleasure to read it. =]

    All the best and take care.

    Love,
    Debbie

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Cindy this is a flawless description of Tornado

    Fsams anlysis of your poem:

    Heading:

    The heading "Tornado" is 100% cohesive and relavent to the content.

    Poetic competence:

    The poem is well adhered to the Haiku rules and as I know about this type, it should be descriptive....and no doubt that this is 100% descriptive. The lexis used really matches the ppoem and it makes the right piece with the inntended meaning with regard to the caption. It has both lexical and poetic qualities.

    Content:

    The precise words add so much of meaning in to the Haiku strings that readers feel a complete description of a Tornado. Great Cindy :)

    Rating:

    No doubt it is worth 5/5

    Remarks:

    Dear Cindy, your poems always captivate my heart and induce me to read with all my heart. This is flawless poetry. Tc

    "impinged, rumble, twirls"

  • 17 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Nice string haikus....I always thought just one is too short....can almost picture those dark stormy skies and the stillness of the wait!

  • 17 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    Cindy you did an amazing job on this piece as if one was standing and watching it as it takes place ,wonderfully written and very powerful write ,great choice of words, very job my friend your friend Tracy d 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Hebe

    Great poem.
    the imagery is great.
    I really like the words you chose.
    Enjoyed reading it.
    Take care