Wow i loved it, it was so sweet. it had alot of emotions behind it. i thought it was amazingly written. 5/5

I know it's a concrete poem,
but could you capitalize your i's =]

back to the poem.

Okay, this poem is definitely a song =] I can see these as lyrics to one, or maybe I just am crazy.
But anyway, this is OK, I mean, I think I would have liked it much better if it looked like more work was put into it (which, it being a concrete poem, more was probably put in it).

It is very difficult changing a concrete poem into a regular verse poem,
because it changes its shape. It changes the meaning, and therefore what I am ready isn't really what you wrote.

So I can't really comment completely and honestly on this piece.
Would you care to describe how you formatted the concret poem originally?

5/5
~Stephen White

That was soo beautifully written! The flow was good, the word choice was decent, and the concept was beautiful! 5/5

Sweet beginning to the poem.
Made me want to read more and see where the poem would head.

The second line was real darling, I love it when people describe their feelings of love. Makes me think of mine and then gets me all happy. ^_^

"To know that you're the only one,
The other piece that completes me."

^^^
I love those lines. I really do believe in the idea of soulmates and that was a really gorgeous way of explaining that notion.

"So turn the out lights.
Let's live in the night,
and you can hold me tight,
till the morning sun shines bright."

^^^
The rhyming in those lines, was genius and made me feel all warm and fuzzy. what a beautiful love poem.

The last two sections were simply wonderful and a brilliant end to a great poem.

You def have a way with words.

well done
^_^