by Infected with His Deadly Love Jul 11, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Baby cries in the lonely box |
In the first stanza, last line, I think you should have used quotation marks. A bit of your rhyming sounded a bit forced. I found the flow too be off in some spots too, try counting syllables to fix this perhaps? Good poem though. :) |
by Hope
This poem is so touching, its profound and you know what thats just good writing, I love it Keep up the good work |