"Pleasures chills down a lowly souls spine."
`I think it is either pleasure or chill, is it not?

Anyway, I think it was a fantastic piece of work. Overlooking the need of certain lines to be tightened up, I was relatively intrigued with the erotic theme that you'd employed; in fact, there was some sort of a dramatic and quixotic tale in between its lines, even if I can't thoroughly decipher its meaning. It's quite mystifying, yet poignantly written at the same time.
Still, nevertheless, you did a rather brilliant job with this piece. Thanks for sharing. :] 5/5 ~Marian

Very cool poem... beautifully written! Thanks for the poem comment you wrote me... it was a while ago so idk if you remember... sorry i didn't comment one of yours sooner... been super busy but i'll keep checking back and reading your poems... i love them!! take care :-)

Wow...very impressive...i loved this wording and rhyming in this poem...

i really enjoyed reading.

good job! 5/5