Wow this is great poem about a very depressing subject. Its very different from what I've read on this site. Hopefully you don't think this way. But nevertheless it was a great piece. 5/5

"way you're pretty than that facade;" < Prettier, I believe.
"We'll got more patience than a suicidal, and more time then God, but we don't want to waste you." < Excluding the "We'll that should be We've" This is the BESTLINEEVER.
I absolutely love it dear. The line excluding the ' and we don't want to waste you' is okay. But, with that added in there it's quite the line. :]

Keep it up, dear.
Amazing write.
5/5

LMFAO. Crazygonuts.
I totally forgot about that. :| I won't from now on though.

Oohh. i love your wording.

here's what needs to be fixed:
We've got more patience then a suicidal and we've got more time then God.
[[than, read through the poem again for this error]]

wow. i love the tone in this poem. almost made me laugh. i liked this poem, very good. however, some of the lines seemed a little too long and messed with the flow.

i wanna give you a 4.5/5 but i cant, so ill round it up.

I forgot about this.

CRAZYgoNUT!

I thought this was amazing! The whole flow was great and the line "We've got more patience then a suicidal and we've got more time then God. "...made me smile *shrugs* I dont know why but it kept my attention...I liked that you used it to end the peom as well. 5/5

Brittany

Thw whole poem is very cohesive and it is just in the right category. You have nicely written it and your poems are really unique in rhythm i=and structure. Max ratings dear

With love
Fsams

Wow! what a great oem, alothough its rather depressing, you penned it beautifully. i love th words that you have chosen to use. Its rather unique i beleive deffinatly deseves a 5/5. very inspiaring!
CrazyGoNuts lol!
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