This is seriously amazing- keep it up.

You are a really good writer. I loved this poem and the way you wrote it from a different perspective. Keep up the good work.

It was long but it's worth reading it :) You have a great vocab, and the flow was smooth.

I really love this stanza:
Every imperfection seemed so perfect,
She held herself with such grace and poise.
She was so different from those dime-a-dozen fakes.
In her eyes held so many mysteries.
^^ That's really good.

Her kisses were like lightning;
^^Great simile :)

You deserve a 5/5! Keep up the fantastic work!

It was long...But I loved reading every word of it...

Enojoyable read...5/5

Wow. now that was long. yet it was amazing. the words you used are just brilliant. 5/5

My heart was shattered, but I would never let her see that.
It wasn't her fault, life was cruel to her.
The mysteries she held were not her own,
But those the cruel world had placed upon her shoulders.
^except this stanza whole piece is SUPERB!!!
I don't like the title but you wrote this one amazingly. First six stanzas are greatest. I really enjoyed in this poem. It deserves 5/5

How you could take a title like that and make it into such a sad poem I will never know lol, you amaze me more and more with every poem that I read of yours, I loved this Darling..`twas great.

"Her kisses were like lightning;
I felt that thunder in my chest;"

^^ I loved that! Reminded me of another country song I`ve heard but I can`t quite remember which one.

5.5
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heartchuu.