Please, oh please, let his death be all but neat.
[[I really hated this line. =/.]]

Leave it behind, never to return, never to return.
Oh, oh just let it burn, just let it burn.
[[WOOOO! Now THIS is my kind of line! +1000 points for it! Lol.]]

Now, I liked it, though the flow seemed to drop once and nothing but that one line really caught my attention. It just seemed so...hm. I don't know the word. It didn't seem like it came from the heart, I guess you could say. Forgive me.
However, I'm giving you a five because it was pretty well written and there's no reason to downvote. Nice job.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5